I have been bearing something for quite some time now. I have been hiding something for quite some
time now. Something that is a very big burden on me. Something that I can not
help my father Shiva had wanted me to be a man my entire life. I had planned on telling my wife but I just
could not find the exact time that fit out life. Times were so great with us I didn’t want to
do anything that would rock the boat. My
life was so happy with me I just knew that telling her that I was truly a woman
was really going to upset her and that she would possibly not love me anymore
and would more than likely want to leave me. The burden is so hard to bear now
days, and it is literally all that I think about. I am going to have to figure
out how to tell my wife eventually the truth once and for all.
“Sweetheart I have to tell you something that you may not
love me anymore for, but I have to tell you anyway. I am I fact a woman.”
Explained Sikhandini.
Sikhandini’s wife cried and wept with sorrow and disbelief.
“We are going to fix this, I am going to figure out a way to
change into a man so we can live happily and be husband and wife forever.” Said
Sikhandini.
Sikhandini ended up finding Sthuna who was a yaksha wiling to trade
genders with Sikhandini.
“My Father wanted a boy all of his life and all of my life I
felt that I was never good enough for him.
I was depressed for my entire life because I felt that my father didn’t
love me for me. I felt that the only way he looked at me was with disgust.”
Said Sikhandini.
“I am willing to help you to see what it is like to be a
different gender. I feel deep sympathy for your childhood and want to help you
and your wife. I will prepare a spell that will swap our genders.” Said
Sthuna.
“Oh how could I ever repay you! I am so grateful for what
you are doing for my family!” said Sikhandini.
Once the spell was over Sikhandini’s wife ran over to him
and wrapped her arms around him. She told him that she loved him and thanked
Sthuna for what he had done.
Bibliography, Buck, William (1973). Mahabharata.
Author's Note- I decided to write about Sikhandini and Sthuna because I thought that it was very interesting reading about the gender changes. I also though it was so sad someone wanting to change genders. I was also glad that the story ended the way it did because it ended with Sikhandi and his wife living happily.
Author's Note- I decided to write about Sikhandini and Sthuna because I thought that it was very interesting reading about the gender changes. I also though it was so sad someone wanting to change genders. I was also glad that the story ended the way it did because it ended with Sikhandi and his wife living happily.
Hey Kelsey,
ReplyDeleteNice story! It flowed very well and was structured nicely so it was an easy read. I noticed an error in your story though. In the first paragraph you wrote “Something that I cannot help my father Shiva had wanted me to be a man my entire life”. I’m not exactly sure what you’re trying to do here but I see it as a run-on sentence.
I was excited to read this since I had not read the original. I enjoy reading something new and refreshing.
ReplyDeleteI noticed there is no author's note. A few sentences would do to explain any difference between your retelling and the original.
I would put a semicolon between "help" and "my father" in the first paragraph to correct the run-on. Also the sentences that start with "Something" are fragments. you could replace "Something that is" in one of them with "This secret" or something to that effect. And in the next one you could say "It". The part of the paragraph that says "fit out life" doesn't really make sense to me. Did you mean "fit our life"? You also typed "life" instead of "wife" in this same paragraph.
When Sikhandini is confessing his/her gender to the wife, you typed "I" instead of "in".
This is such a juicy story; very enthralling!
Hey Kelsey,
ReplyDeleteThis was such an interesting story, to say the least. I was not expecting that he was actually a woman! I have to say that this is a good parallel to struggles that some people have to deal with in today’s world. It made me think about some things I discussed in one of my other classes, as well as Orange is the New Black. Great job! This was incredibly well written.
I have not read the original story so this was very interesting for me to read. Although, I had not read the original story I feel like it would be very interesting. I do wish there was an author's note to figure out your motivation but that is a minor detail
ReplyDeleteI really liked this story and I think you did a good job of making it flow very well. I personally never read the Mahabharata, but this was an interesting story none the less. You did a good job of showing the emotions that they were feeling. I think this is also an interesting topic to write over and you did a good job!
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